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Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Fri 2 Jun 2017 13:25by steve_branchu
Dear Maxim Yurievitch,
You will find in attachment my first essay about your papers in composite dark matter. Please tell me what do you think about it ?
With my best regards,
Steve
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Fri 9 Jun 2017 18:12by Maxim Khlopov
Dear Steve,
The review should be largely extended and corrected. Everywhere - use English terms, e.g. particles not particules.
My comments are in the attached file. I marked yellow without comments misprints, as well as Grammar and stylistic errors. Main Grammar error: if the noun is in plural the verb should be also in plural.
With the best regards
M.Yu.Khlop[ov
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Tue 13 Jun 2017 16:37by steve_branchu
Dear Maxim,
This my second essay for my small thesis. I have to complete the conclusion, the sources and the last section, but I wish your opinion about the others modifications.
Best regards,
Steve
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Thu 15 Jun 2017 12:06by Maxim Khlopov
Dear Steve,
My comments are in the attached file.
Please be attentive to grammar and misprints.
Regards
M.Yu.Khlopov
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Thu 15 Jun 2017 18:53by steve_branchu
Dear Maxim, this is my referat's draft with the corrections. Please tell me what do you think about it.
Best regards
Steve
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Thu 15 Jun 2017 23:05by Maxim Khlopov
Still you have neglected some my comments. I marked yellow statements that should be corrected.
Journal references should contain volume and page, arXiv publications - numbers
With the best regards
M.Yu.Khlopov
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Sun 18 Jun 2017 11:22by steve_branchu
Dear Maxim, this is my small thesis with all corrections
Best regards
Steve
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Sun 18 Jun 2017 15:44by Maxim Khlopov
Dear Stefe,
There are still a lot of things - V or pp in references.
I have also marked yellow some stylistic and grammar error
Regards
M.Yu.Khlopov
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Mon 19 Jun 2017 04:51by steve_branchu
Dear Maxim, I made the coorections but there are 2 references I didn't find the missing informations. I hope there are no more mystakes.
Best regards
Re: Small thesis and exam of Steve Branchu
Posted:
Mon 19 Jun 2017 09:33by Maxim Khlopov
Dear Steve,
Still the text is not perfect and not only references, but also misprints should be corrected,
as well as the style of the text should be essentially improved
I take today at 14.00 (Paris time) exam for two students from MEPHI. This date is mandatory for them.
As for you, you have a choice: either I admit you to exam today, but you should be really excellent at exam to pretend to on sufficiently high mark, or you continue work on the text to improve it.
Note that even if you pass the exam today the level of your text is not sufficient to consider it as appropriate for the entrance exam to PhD courses.
Therefore, I'd like to recommend you to continue work on the text to make it really perfect, but it's up to you.
I look forward to your choice
With the best regards
M.Yu.Khlopov